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Friday 22 September 2017

Partly Cloudy

Partly Cloudy
It was a beautiful summer sunny day, birds were flying around the city like little bees.The birds were nearly as tall as the tree’s. The clouds were pink and white the house’s where nice bright colours, and this is where the story started.


Once there was a very nice city and it was the most quiet city of all. The birds were flying around and giving out presents like Puppies, Cats, Babies and all sorts of things. The birds looked like seagulls with long beaks like Pinocchio. When the birds finished they would go back to the magical fluffy clouds that looked like cotton candy.


They are the magic clouds in the shining sky that make the presents and then the birds deliver them as a job, the birds love their job, except one bird that works for a dark grey cloud, all he can make is deadly, ferocious animals.  The dark grey clouds name is Gus, it’s not his fault he can only make dangerous animals, the reason is because he was a defect made by the cloud queen, but she was so nice she offered him a job as a cloud worker.  


One day Gus’ bird came back, and he wasn’t happy.

Gus had made a crocodile. The bird's name is peeck. Peck picked up the crocodile. “OUCH” the crocodile bit peek's head! Gus put the crocodile in the white bag. Peeck picked up the bag and flew away.  When peck came back Gus had already made another animal, a porcupine!  Gus had then made a Bighorn Sheep, then Peck delivered that.  Next thing that happened was, that Gus made a cloud of a shark, and Peck was terrified, so he flew away to a pink cloud, who gave him a big white bag.  Inside the bag was a mystery, but what Gus was feeling, was more important, Gus was so angry he felt like he could electrocute everything with his thunder and lightning.  He was so angry that he started crying over and over, until Peck came back to him with the big white bag.  Peck opened the bag, inside was armor to protect Peck from whatever was going to hurt him next, and for the rest of his life.  Gus was so happy that he made another animal, an eel, Peck decided to hold it, but they found out that is was electric!  Quite shocking!

3 comments:

  1. Hi Khaylanie it is Makenzie. I love your post but you could make the story littler becouse the story is to long. And you can make sore that the story makes sens.

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  2. Thank you for your nice comment. I can't make it smaller becouse I don't know how I am going to make it shorter and I don't know where it doesn't make sense. Can you tell me?

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  3. Hi Khaylanie it is Shanarnia. I really love your post but you could make the story a little bit big because the story is to long. Next time you should put them in paragraph.

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